Comments : Falling Apart

  • 18 years ago

    by Mel

    I think it's very good. Check out the word 'straggle' do you mean 'struggle'?

  • 18 years ago

    by Jaime

    You have a pretty good start there, with a little work it will be a very nice (although somewhat sad) poem.

    I believe "straggle" means to fall behind or something, is that what you meant by it?

    Good luck with this, I'll have to check it out when you finish it.

  • 18 years ago

    by ~ICanOnlyImagine~

    Life has lost its meaning
    I no longer wish to be here
    I'm constantly haunted by the memory
    When you'd whisper sweet words in my ear

    Again, great work!!! Theres not much i can say....lol

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    This was a really good poem. Very sad story and I can tell you threw your emotions into it. Great job :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    This is sad. But I can relate. So I really like this piece. You expressed your emotions really clearly too. Another awesome job! Keep writing! 5/5

    `taleee xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Josh

    Ah, and i stumble upon yet another noteworthy poem of yours.

    You are a gifted writer, the way you portray your thoughts and experiences has a certain effect that absorbs you into the poem.
    There is also room for ambiguous interpretations of your work.
    A truly inspiring read!
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    I like this Poem..
    It's sad, and I understood what you meant by it, flows well too, so keep up the good work..

    Also thanks for commenting my Poems..

    And..To answer your Question.. Lol.. Yeah, Sad poems and Love poems seem to be mostly my style, they just come to me easier then happy ones do. ^^