Beautiful and sad, the second stanza is so powerful and heartbreaking. So well written, awesome wording!

Very nice poem Simon. It was truely sad, yet so powerful. Haven't read your stuff in a while!

Wow.... that was great Simon.... I have been gone for a little while... but your poetry just get better. I felt every word of it... great poem my friend 5/5 you're truly an amazing poet!

There are some pieces of work that make you cry. This one is so sad, it tugs at the heartstrings.

great work. you have an amazing talent.

take care
shobhana

Pretty good. the only thing is..well im not sure you did this on purpose or what but

This place I sit,
Shall not consume me.
I shall sit here,

seems a little repetitive with teh siting.
besides that its pretty good.

This piece is so sad Simon , you have painted a picture in my head of a little old man just sitting there all alone , with his elbows on his knees and his hands under his chin . Waiting !!

I fear I sometimes read something else out of someone's poetry but this is the image that I received from this piece . It is wonderfully written Simon and I just had to reread it many times because I just loved it so.....

Short, sweet and to the point.
I love your style and I can almost feel the emotion dripping off the page.

Are You Published? If You Aren't You Should Be, This Sounds Like Quality Literature, Its Not Like Other Poems I Read Daily, This One Has Poetential And Substance...I Enjoyed It 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Lovely write, SiE, it really was deep and captivating... Dhaval

Kewl Beans

"Biding my time,
And dreaming of you."

^^ the way that you ended it completely gives the poem a make over...it captivates me...the way you have conveyed your emotions is brilliant...i really cannot find anything to critique in this siE, it is really flawless. But I think that the third last line..."entertaining my thoughts", is a little long, and takes away the honor that the last two lines should recieve...only if you could use a few less syllables in that, i think it would be a little better...but i dont know...obviously, you write better than me lol. Take care sie, Dhaval

Hey SiE, I really love this write..... gives a person something to think about. The only thing I see with it are the last 3 three lines....

Entertaining my thoughts,
Biding my time,
And dreaming of you.

Maybe say something like

Biding my time,
Entertaining thoughts,
Dreaming of you.

or

Entertaining thoughts,
Biding my time
Dreaming of you

Other than that, it's a perfect read. I truly enjoyed it.