by physco May 15, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
There was once a young girl, |
Something a touch different. Perhaps not the best or most original but rather well for something a little strange with content. The ending just didn't go with the rest yet it did have great flow and such. |
by Netta
This poem right here is so real it seems as if it happened for real and it feels like a movie based on a true story but keep writing things like this and you will go some where in life trust me on that |
This is good. it has good structure, and although the rhythm changes slightly towards the end, the pace slow and so the words have more impact. i liked the imagery you used, it created a real feeling within the poem. well done! keep it up! |
by physco
Please please please v/c it will mean so much to me |