This was sad. Awesome idea though about the cardboard guitar..reminded me of this one time I went to school with a cardboard skateboard. Hm. Weird. Anywho, Awesome poem! 5/5

`taleee xx

Haha you entered this in my new contest, and I like it. Hey sorry u didn't get a top place in my other contest, but i'm gunna give u 2 r/c since u were really good. i liked this poem a lot, 5/5

It's really good for a contest poem. I hope you don'tmind me making some suggestions. It's up to you if you want to take them as this is good on it's own. I really love the cardboard guitar idea and the title how it was attention getting.
Loving you is what I know
Loving you is what I want the most
This is different wording but still when I first read the lines it felt more of the same because of the same start of both lines.
A plan to make a life together
A plan to get married
Same thing here. When I first read them I thought they were basically saying the same thing.
Sitting here
With a glock
As I feel a tear
I pull the trigger
This poem had a lot of emotion hidden in the lines but when I got to this part it kind of changed my view of this poem. To me it felt like another, "Can't live without you poem." when to me it could have had potental to be something else.

Hmm It had a bit of a rocky start and the flow was kind of hard to go with in the beginning, but as the poem picked up you really go onto a flow path! I loved this poem mainly because you made it unique by giving it some of your personal flavor insted of the normal sterotype poems. This idea lets the reader really get a feel of who you are which makes them feel a closer bond to you and like the poem all the more! Excellent work, it's people like you that inspire me to write more with the main idea of someday getting to your leval! Keep the good poems rolling!

Very strong, and very emotional. great poem 5/5

Great poems nice word usage

This is really sad, you can tell you know how to put all of your words and emotions into poems. Keep up the good work, hope all goes well for you :)

Hey Joe , just wanted to let you know I found your poem on someone else's myspace claiming he has wrote it...he posted it 6 days after you posted yours .Damn plagerizers....Just thought I'd let you know ...he plagerized one of mine also and I have told him to remove it immediately .

Take care and here is the link

blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=blog.view&friendID=5879599&blogID=123445600&Mytoken=E8BDAE0A-2638-413B-954A4A91A9C7A14B415632750

If it doesn't work let me know and I will send it again....

Never mind Joe he seems to have removed them now . I told him he also plagerized a few others, so he removed them all.....
Yahhh 1 more plagerizer taught a lesson...

Ohh, nice. I think I've read this one be for. Anyway. Awsome, the end made me shivver. 5/5

Good write. the glock line kind of interupts the flow of that stanza, but makes you stop and think at the same time. ryhmes arent very forced but simple. good. id say the last stanza did the best in my eyes. :you happy now that im not around? '
good line

Tom

I loved the use of the question at the end, i think that was really effective because it actually makes you think about the content of the poem. little bits of this seemed to disruppt the flow, but other than that really imaginative and emotional, i loved the title, pure genius :D

*wordless* I don't know what to say. This was very nicely writen and the ending showed so much emotion that I nearly fell over in aw. I loved how the ending showed a slight bit of hate. I don't know if that was meant to be, but I love it regardless.
One thing though. I read your other poem and you said that it was true. Please, don't make this poem reality!
Keep it up, 5/5

Hatori
The Illusionist