Comments : Come See

  • 18 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Intersting piece. It has a nice flow and intriguing imagery.
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 18 years ago

    by Cory Mastrandrea

    I loved this. The implicity and images brought forth are great. Entirely lost to the meaning, i would like to know what it means to you, or if you just wrote it to describe something. But it is beautiful. A couple grammar mistakes though. in the first stanza you put a comma between them and that. it doesn't belong there. When using "that" in the way you used it it implies a necessity, If you want to aadd the comma the word is "which", which implies that the stuff you added is extra. A comma also doesn't need to go between tricks and for in the second stanza. It kind of impedes the flow of your poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by ari

    Wow, yea, the answers one is good, i guess. thanks, this one is awesome. great imagery!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    Very nice. I liked this one. I don't even know the words to describe this poem, except to say that it has great imagery, and a sense of wonder in it. Like you are inviting the audience (readers) to go and experience something different.
    I cannot help but feel that there is a hidden meaning/message in this, but I guess that's all left to the imagination =)
    Great Poem.
    Keep it up!
    Take Care and God Bless,
    Sarah-Joy