by HOLLY ARMER
Intersting piece. It has a nice flow and intriguing imagery. |
I loved this. The implicity and images brought forth are great. Entirely lost to the meaning, i would like to know what it means to you, or if you just wrote it to describe something. But it is beautiful. A couple grammar mistakes though. in the first stanza you put a comma between them and that. it doesn't belong there. When using "that" in the way you used it it implies a necessity, If you want to aadd the comma the word is "which", which implies that the stuff you added is extra. A comma also doesn't need to go between tricks and for in the second stanza. It kind of impedes the flow of your poem. |
by ari
Wow, yea, the answers one is good, i guess. thanks, this one is awesome. great imagery! |
by Lovely Bones
Very nice. I liked this one. I don't even know the words to describe this poem, except to say that it has great imagery, and a sense of wonder in it. Like you are inviting the audience (readers) to go and experience something different. |