Heyy :) your doing good, i just think you need a little more practice.. hehe! so.. keep practicing! o, n btw, i love your name! itz so cute!
jessy xox

LOL. I am so sorry for that comment. I made it a lonnnggg time ago when I knew very little about poetryy. Now, reading this poem again I can see how wrong my assumptionss were. This poem was unique and well worded, the flow was good and the metaphors throughout worked well. The only line i did not like was "Can I hear them whispering? Or am I a paranoid freak show?" Maybe get rid of "show" and just make it "Or am I a paranoid freak?" Nice poemm. 5/5