Aww.. that was good, but a lil confusing and mixed up at times... try and rearrange it so that it is all in the right order and a little clearer! keep up the good work!
jessy xox

Yeah... i was kinda writing it when i was in class in our school library.. i didnt have time to sort it out till later.. read it now and see what you think..
lots of love
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