Wow great!

NICE, short but it still was an amazing poem.. you showed great emotion in it.. and used a great vocabulary to express it 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I thought your choice of words was great and I could really feel the poem. I thought you were very talented with this poem and it deffinately deserves a 5. I thought it was super :)

Wow.. that was very good... your emotion really shined through and the poem flowed well! keep it up! 5/5
jessy xox

I really liked how the structure was different yet the words kept the flow going throughout the poem. Especially how keping it short you added more word depth and the words felt that it was a quick speed but that could be because the message you might have been sending was that. I just wanted to know you had one stanza with ending life and the other with taking a life. It just seemed repetitive.

I agree with kaylee the flow was great throughout this expressive poem

Wow that is really good.. the short lines gave it more depth and brought out the emotions. It flowed well and was really deep. Great job on this!

This was good aswel. But at the end it felt like I was wanting more. Though the lines were short, They were powerfull. But it just felt like something was missing. Still a great job though. 5/5

`taleee xx

Nice work. i like your poem

I love poems like this. Poems with short fragmented lines. It seem you say so much more with fewer words....beautiful!

It was a great poem i enjoyed it alot

Pretty good....5/5

Mallori

The length of the lines are what made it effective yet at the same time it almost seemed....unfinished. It was powerful for the way it was but still there seemed to be something missing. Not sure what though.
~Fallen

I loved the way you were soo undescriptive, but got like... right to the point. this is very unique and your an awesome writer and i love reading your poems... keep up the amazing work -jen-

Good ! i am impressed !

Great use of writing!

5/5

Awesome...i love how you just get right to the point. its great!!

5/5 great work. keep it up!

I loved this poem! It was cool how you used the first letter of every beginning word twice

FF
GG
SS
EE

In the beginning and then mixed it up at the end! Very different and nice!

Awesome nice work