You have me beggin for more......!?!?!?!?!?!?!

Well well well,I guess you could make the poem stronger.Good rhymes,but it lacks of something in the part from "I couldn't believe......he swam to me".It's just a suggestion,the rest of the poem is beautiful,only these two stofes should get stronger,deeper,They're too childish if compared with the rest...that's a full 4

Even thought that wasnt about me it kind of made me feel like i was this boy, but i know that im not so yeah...

This was so sweet! One of my favourites yet

I like how u leave mystery to this poem and i loved the ocean setting very good