Comments : Slip away

  • 18 years ago

    by dora

    Very t0uching g0od j0b 0n this 0ne t0o!

    l0ve fr0m
    d0ra

  • 18 years ago

    by aaron 1 remo

    Hey that was great the only bit of constructive critisism is perhaps if you changed the rhyming scheme from aabbccddeeff to ababcdcdeeff maybe it would have more depth. But I don't know it was pretty good anyway
    much love
    Aaron (remo) xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Joyo

    I liked it. I really did.