Finale for Perfection

I didn't like the "to spotlight her successful victory." line. I might have missed the point, but "successful" seems somehow redundant.

Still, it's nicely written and conjurs up grand images; albeit ones of darkness!

"The applause and laugher all died away" I think you mean 'laughter'.

This was yet another great piece. It was a tad short. But you filled it with so much true emotions. And it was very strong. Once again, Well done. You're a fantastic writer =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Ohh hunni I am speachless, this was so very beautiful, so meaningful and just so sad in a unique way!! This poem took my breath away and I could picture it all in my mind, beautiful!!! Felt like you could have written the poem about me....Well hope you are okay sweety?? let me know okay.

Much Love sabrina

I Can Relate, I'm a Perfectionist In Everything I Do, Its Starting To Become a Problem, I Loved The Way You Were Very Descriptive And Used Very Un-Common Words...It Was Pure Eye-Candy From a Literature Perspective *Keep It Up* 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Whoa! That's actually REALLY creative and really touching...eerie but in a way that everyone can't help but love. The vocabulary was beautiful, not too strong but perfectly expressed.

And not to mention the whole thing basically kicked @$$!! lmao