Whoa! That's actually REALLY creative and really touching...eerie but in a way that everyone can't help but love. The vocabulary was beautiful, not too strong but perfectly expressed.

And not to mention the whole thing basically kicked @$$!! lmao

I Can Relate, I'm a Perfectionist In Everything I Do, Its Starting To Become a Problem, I Loved The Way You Were Very Descriptive And Used Very Un-Common Words...It Was Pure Eye-Candy From a Literature Perspective *Keep It Up* 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

Ohh hunni I am speachless, this was so very beautiful, so meaningful and just so sad in a unique way!! This poem took my breath away and I could picture it all in my mind, beautiful!!! Felt like you could have written the poem about me....Well hope you are okay sweety?? let me know okay.

Much Love sabrina

"The applause and laugher all died away" I think you mean 'laughter'.

This was yet another great piece. It was a tad short. But you filled it with so much true emotions. And it was very strong. Once again, Well done. You're a fantastic writer =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

I didn't like the "to spotlight her successful victory." line. I might have missed the point, but "successful" seems somehow redundant.

Still, it's nicely written and conjurs up grand images; albeit ones of darkness!