Yup. I loved this. It was really sad. And I could relate alot. I feel abit like this with my mum. Awesome poem hun, It was beyond good. 5/5

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It was sad, flowed well, good topic, imagination used, feelings and thoughts expressed well. overall a very good poem.
well done

There are some weak areas, but as a whole I feel this has great potential. I love the metaphoric comparisons. The use of the word "cheesy" is slightly cheesy. You should find a synonym to add value to this poem.

[PygmyPuff]

Awww.. wow, that was very good, very emotional, and very descriptive.. i didn't really like this stanza though::

So if you ever want to find me
It will be really really easy
Im searching for everyone
Even though it sounds very cheesy

^ it kinda threw me off, with the double "really" and the word "cheesy".. not sure why, but that didn't appeal to me.. all in all, great poem though! 5/5

Wow...really good poem. it was well thought out...great descriptions...it had so much emotion in it...it was really sad. 5/5. i loved it.

Great poem jade!! I really enjoyed it and thanx for the comments.