Those and These

by Sarah Ann   May 17, 2006


These faces; I don't know them
Those books - why are they here
These heartbreaks; never mending
Those conflicts I do fear

These pictures; unfamiliar
Those strangers-over there
These elements are meaningless
Those pretending like they care

These hands on clocks are ticking
Those there are wasting time
These limits - overbearing
Those; convicts of a crime

These obstacles keep coming
Those there do only wrong
These people cry a blood of tears
Those there wish they were gone.

-I know it may not make sense, I am not expecting it to. Really, I probably would only understand it, but basically it's just portraying my state of confusion now in life. Criticize please. I know it's bad and needs improvement of some sort.-

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  • 18 years ago

    by Stephanie and Laura

    Dont really understand it but at the same time i do lol i liked it good rhyming you have alot of talent
    thanks for the comment

    keep the talent keep the faith keep the abilty to write beautifully

    laura

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    Hey.. well, about criticizing, i wont be able to give u much.. but in my owm opinion, i think this poem, tho confusing, is reli clear about the state of mind ur in.. as a reader, i can feel the pain and confusion and also the hope that it wud someday turn out right.. it had good wording, and perfect rhyme..
    gr8 job
    thnx 4 the comment
    take care
    NannO

  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    Hey hun!
    you know my opinion already don't you? lol
    I was kinda surprised by the poem, don't ask why! the idea I never read a poem like that and thats what I love in poems! unique pieces!!
    gr8 work hun! and it DOES make sense-at least for me-its a very well written piece ;)
    keep up the gifted taltn
    Luv
    NemO x0x0x0x

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