Hey hun!
you know my opinion already don't you? lol
I was kinda surprised by the poem, don't ask why! the idea I never read a poem like that and thats what I love in poems! unique pieces!!
gr8 work hun! and it DOES make sense-at least for me-its a very well written piece ;)
keep up the gifted taltn
Luv
NemO x0x0x0x

Hey.. well, about criticizing, i wont be able to give u much.. but in my owm opinion, i think this poem, tho confusing, is reli clear about the state of mind ur in.. as a reader, i can feel the pain and confusion and also the hope that it wud someday turn out right.. it had good wording, and perfect rhyme..
gr8 job
thnx 4 the comment
take care
NannO

Dont really understand it but at the same time i do lol i liked it good rhyming you have alot of talent
thanks for the comment

keep the talent keep the faith keep the abilty to write beautifully

laura