by Megann Lee May 18, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Theses thoughts are locked so deep inside. |
by MudkipzPlx
We Loved it Megan. |
by MaSkEdSoUl
I liked this alot, its pretty sad too! 5/5 |
by Richard
It almost made me cry |
Very expressive peice, i agree with Kaylee on some aspects, though i also think that the way you wrote this peice was powerful even if the topic is slightly over done (espessially upon this site). but it you just take this peice in it's own right without referance to what others have produced it is a good peice, the flow and structure are good and the content well written (though some aspects do seem repeted slightly) the feelings are well epressed and the content clear thougout. |
One thing i would like to mention, try and keep your peoms in one perspective. it gets confusing it you switch from like, first person, to third person. otherwise, it was a fairly good poem 4/5 |