Hmm. this was interesting.Yes, i liked it and enjoyed the graphic references and felt that the stereotype suicide reference worked somehow. Maybe you could explain the ending to me abit but otherwise this was excellent

Hmmm... this was very, interesting... though i see the point your trying to get accross in this poem... i just dont know. You are kind of contradicting yourself, i think, when you say "Locked so deep inside, not even death could bring them to the surface.".. and also i dont really think you needed to add the line "I life lived, that never should of been cared about Nor Lived."...but yeah... just some good hearted suggestions :) Its a good poem. You should definately keep writing. -jen-

That was definately interesting!! I dont know if i understood the whole thing!! It was a good poem tho!! I agree with Jen to i think the same thing as her!! Never quit writing!!

This poem is the type called, "Teen angst." Basically too many people are writing about this topic that for most of them it's not at all a poem but a place to vent their feelings in the hope to gain some sympathy or for the few to search inside themselves. I don't give sympathy for people who do cut, which I hope you do not, so I'll base this on what I really thought.
It seemed a bit repetitive:
My feelings and heart encased in this {dark} room.
{For fear} they will be broke into nothing but meaningless shards.
{Theses thoughts} are locked so deep inside.
The pain of hiding the {deep dark} secrets.
{These thoughts} shall forever stay hidden..
{For a fear,} the room will be discovered some day soon.
For me as a reader I felt no connection to the poem speaker. The speaker didn't show much emotion nor do we get a real look at the emotional problems in her/his head to know what is leading them down this road. Just something you might want to look over.

One thing i would like to mention, try and keep your peoms in one perspective. it gets confusing it you switch from like, first person, to third person. otherwise, it was a fairly good poem 4/5

Very expressive peice, i agree with Kaylee on some aspects, though i also think that the way you wrote this peice was powerful even if the topic is slightly over done (espessially upon this site). but it you just take this peice in it's own right without referance to what others have produced it is a good peice, the flow and structure are good and the content well written (though some aspects do seem repeted slightly) the feelings are well epressed and the content clear thougout.

1st line of the 4th stanza the "l" is missing off "lifeless"

It almost made me cry

this is sad *hugs*

5/5 for sure

kinda sketchy the first stanza but really good in overall

I liked this alot, its pretty sad too! 5/5

We Loved it Megan.

Love MKKA!