Wow that was brilliant....great flow and style....it pulls you in from the start and doesn't let go....great...5/5

That was painful... thanks 4 sharing, lay... i miss u :) if u havent read tattoo yet, pls do. it's very mysterious/love themed. :) in a way it's dark, too... but the pictures run thru the mind.

i luv dis poem and the entrance... and yes, lust is something so many confuse with love. thanks again for posting..

~luv ya,
rain

Oh yeah... i wondered if ud like to enter this? it's on heartbreak and i entered my old poem "Heartbreak"... it felt so good to read it again.

Nice poem lala, this guy sounds a bit abusive though.I can see some of the relations of this poem to real life. I like how you twisted it to make it sound threatening and "the deadly dance of desire" is a propelling line.