That sounds as too many wishes.. :o) but i respect the way u potrayed ur eagerness to help others...its a great write and i enjoyed going through it

all the best & take care
5/5

I learned this in English class. "Personification" and you used it like a pro. Giving non-animated objects life! Very nicely done, I can see all of this happening. The last stanza, I can definitely relate to, and holds so much meaning for me right not. It was really great you ended with that one, I'm sure everyone has something they would like to bury beneath the sands.. especially the sands of time.

DANG YOU DARIEN!!!! ^^^^ I learned that to and that was EXACTLY what I was going to say..I wasnted to sound smart :(...actually personification is giving non-human things human like qaulities..there that sounded better then his lol

Luanne I loved this write...my fave part was each stanza I liked how you gave each piece of nature a wish ...I really enjoyed this write Luanne and great use of PERSONIFICATION! haha
love you much
Chels

Luanne this poem was beautiful. I really like nature tying in with the life section and being basically brought to life as if they weren't elements. I just, and I hope you can understand that this is a sugestion, think that by having the final line and each stanza repeating kind of made the poem feel awkward. Maybe just have that line once at the very end of the poem so it doesn't get tiring because this poem really is lovely.

Great poem,....Center of every attraction, You're the object of every desire, Glorious manifestation in the morning Is the demonstration of your beauty. beautiful penned myfriend, may your wish become true, take care, bert.

Pfft.. I was leaving that oone up to you Chelsey :P

hehe Hi again Luanne.. I came back because I liked this poem alot : )

Luanne, this is so beautiful!

"Mountains of strength
teach us to stand tall
speak out for those unable
please grant me this wish"
^^^ This is my favorite stanza!
Really inspiring and beautiful write.. :)

Very nice! I like how you twisted elements of nature with each wish, something I never would've thought of.
The last stanza is brilliant, my favorite in this piece. Take care and keep it up~Holly

Luanne Luanne Luanne
Im breathless it was such a beautiful yeah heart wrenching honest and raw piece of poetry...not only did I relate to it, I think like it, Only Im unable to put it so gracefully eloquent as you have with your words here...another spectacular write darling bravo!
Eirisa xoxo

Sands of promise
bury my past mistakes
make me a better person
please grant me this wish

these lines are really beautiful.

Wow. you truly are a very talented writer! this poem was a great idea and had a lot of thought put into it with each stanza! i love how you keep repeating the title of the poem, it really adds affect! nice job! 5/5