FIRE

by gemowski   May 18, 2006


There you are you shine so bright you give my light all through the night,

there you are a burning flame,
as i stare i feel no pain.

there you are a warm hot flame,
burning my body all over again.

i love to be greeted every night,
you take the ease from my daily fight.

oh how i love it when you shine so bright.
you are my fire my pain my fight
you are my strength morning to night.

you are the fire of my life.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was awesome! Loved this line;
    "you are my strength morning to night"
    Really great poem here. Short but great. Keep up the awesome work, hope to read more from you soon. =] 5/5

    `taleee xx

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Great epcei, it is very original and well written throughout. the flow is smooth and the descriptions fantastic.

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    It's different I'll give you that. I liked it because it was tender and heart warming.
    I'm not sure I'd describe fire burning you as nice, and that's the feeling I got from the read. If you mean warming your skin when you're cold, then I think it could be worded better.
    When you say "warm hot flame" there is no need for the two adjectives as they mean the same thing.
    I liked the final line, very sentimental and a nice way to finish.
    I enjoyed the read, keep writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    The first line wasn't too great. Trying to have too many rhymes in one line makes the line sound sleezy.

  • 18 years ago

    by Cody

    Another poem with a beautful view, I love the symblosim in it wonderful

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