And You Think I'm Happy

I liked the way you repeated the title over again in every line, though I must say, it was a little too much for my liking.

"Secrets are untold | You see it in my eyes | And you think I'm happy?" is my favorite stanza. Not many people use the word "untold", and I like the way you used it here.

4/5

Wow, i Must Say That Was Amazing, It Was Really Deep, And You Had A Good use Of Words, Way To Go!!
5/5
-Stephanie
lol thanx for the advise on my poem!

Aww...hun...i'm so sorry your mom died...that really sucks...then to add more to it you live with you father...and he beats you...after all you've been through?! i'm so sorry...ya know...my life might be bad right now...but at least i'm not physically abused...stay strong hun..

This is just so sad. I like the way your stanzas are phrased to 'speak out' it's like you are talking to someone.

I just lost my mom
She died in a car crash
And you think I'm happy?

these lines really stood out as I didn't really know where the poem was going.
I loved the final stanza too. The whole thing is so heartfelt and angry I don't know what else to say.

Very nice job... You captured such an emotion that most can't. Excellent job.

xDarkSuicidex