Really good poem. I liked the ending. It finished the poem just right. Nice job.

Wow.. that was a perfect ending to a very emotionally powerful poem! great job.. if your poems are all true then that is very sad.. and if you ever need to tlk im here :)
jessy xox

Aweh this poem is sad

*hugs* keep your chin up

5/5

Very powerfully written peice, the repitition really enforcied the point which you were making and the descriptions adn clearity of the plot really added to it's overall power.

5/5

Really powerful poem though it would have been nice to know emotionally how the speaker was feeling. Hope it's not true.

Yesh. I loved this. A set a good message in this poem. And it's sad how people can't see the signs of being unhappy. Really awesome write you have here. I loved it. Keep it up! 5/5

`taleee xx

I like the reptition in this peice it is very effective adding really power and feeling to the poem.

Nice job in this poem. It was strong and there was a lot of emotion in it. WOnderful repetition in your lines as well. Great job.

Wow... like it alot..
the way you make the situtations and end with "and you think i'm happy" i've had this happen alot.. haha.. nice work!!

Great poem i love the ending!!! i like how you gave the situation and then asked "and you think im happy." Its one of the better poem i have read latetly!!! 5/5!! Keep it up!!

Awww.
thats sad.
good poem though.
its a different style.
i like it.
~Emah

Wow! that was very sad..but also very great! it was full of meaningful emotions..you expressed your thoughts beautifully! i loved it 5/5

Very powerful, and very VERY well set out. i love the repetition on "and you think i'm happy?" then the slight change but teh same thing at the end. very effective. i loved it completely. very moving

Awww.. this is so sad. I love the way that you changed the last line in the last stanza, it gave it a great affect. But you did a great job on this. You described everything so well and the repetition of the last line really worked well for this. Great job! 5/5 Keep it up!

Wow-this poem has a great level of depth and emotion! I love the repitition of ''And you think I'm happy?'' at the end of the stanzas--Great write--5/5

Stay Strong----

Sad. You really bring out lots of emotion in the poem. Great work.

Peace. [Sole]

Very nice job... You captured such an emotion that most can't. Excellent job.

xDarkSuicidex

This is just so sad. I like the way your stanzas are phrased to 'speak out' it's like you are talking to someone.

I just lost my mom
She died in a car crash
And you think I'm happy?

these lines really stood out as I didn't really know where the poem was going.
I loved the final stanza too. The whole thing is so heartfelt and angry I don't know what else to say.

Aww...hun...i'm so sorry your mom died...that really sucks...then to add more to it you live with you father...and he beats you...after all you've been through?! i'm so sorry...ya know...my life might be bad right now...but at least i'm not physically abused...stay strong hun..

Wow, i Must Say That Was Amazing, It Was Really Deep, And You Had A Good use Of Words, Way To Go!!
5/5
-Stephanie
lol thanx for the advise on my poem!