Wow.. i thought it was good even without all that stuff you had to think about :P lol! keep up the wonderful work! 5/5
jessy xox

This worked like a dream. And what amazed me even more was that you were using the cinquain form. For me it gave it a good pace and allowed me to savour every syllable. It was a sensual poem with language that appealed to the senses. Spectacular

[lost-laureate]

It was beautiful and I never really read this style poem before which made it a new thing to enjoy. You could sense every word as if you could see the dream being played out in front of you and the please come felt a bit desperate as though someone was longing for someone else.

For being a beginner at that certain form of poetry, you certainly are good! i really enjoyed the poem, and if you hadn't stated that you were new to the style, i never would have guessed!

great job & please check out my stuff!

**meggie**

This has got a nice flow and good use of repitition. Good poem

This is excellent i enjoyed it a lot i loved it all so much i cant pick a favorite couple of lines

Well done anyway. i loved the wording and structure. the emotion was real and evident.

5/5 David