Wow!! I truley loved this poem!!! It was perfect i couldnt change a thing!!! 10/5!! I loved the topic!! It was sad but so good!! I didnt even feel like i was reading it it felt as if i was watching it happen!!! You did a wonderful job!!! One of my favorite poems!!! Great Job!!

While the poem itself was good and the idea was a nice message, it felt a bit on the PSA side and the only reason I say that is because I've seen how some of them were made and this one seems ot fit that. It tells a story in a narrative sort of way to just put one message across while not really adding too much depth to the words. It's nice words and all but it didn't really give me a connection to the kid who had made that mistake. I felt more like watching it from a distance. It felt a bit repetitive as though you were trying too much to get us to see that he was doing drugs:
others do drugs, and ruin their brains.
get caught doing drugs and fall flat on their faces.
He had smoked pot, before driving to school,
he got high, hit a kid, whose body has risen.
Instead maybe you should have gave the kid emotions that we could feel or more in detail about the person's of the child that was killed. Just some suggestions.

This poem is very touching.. i really liked it... is it about someone? or did u just write it?... anyways amazing poem good job

Wow Sean, I loved this poem. It is so true in so many ways. Very well written, and the Flow and Ryhme was amazing. Awesome Job. Keep it up.

Peace, Joe

Good peice. has a great idea and concept to it, though i feel it lcked depth somewhat. the story was clearly told and the structure good thoughout but the writting seemed to lack the depth which this topic could have created.

Wow! that was beautifully written! that was just amazing! and it made it even better because i adore story poems! :) wonderful work!

Aww that is really sad.. is it true? you did a great job on this.. the rhythm and flow of it was really good and it really kept my interest from beginning to end. It's filled with so much emotion and I loved all of it. Great job on this!

Omg, u kno the dare program..they shood read that poem, that is so sad. this is by far the best one ive read by u so far..wow! 5/5 no 36345645/5!!

Much better
a very sad story.
wrapped up nicely
5/5
emma
thank you for entering the contest.

Very powerful and emotional poem. A very true first stanza.