Too much

by ShadowDancer   May 19, 2006


Brother's back on dope again
makes him angry and cold
More scars upon his arm
He's only 13 years old

Too angry to smile
Too angry to care
Too angry to tell us
Too angry to bare

Dad's busy with work
Trying to get us by
To busy to help out Mum
As she tries not to cry

Too busy to notice
Too busy to try
Too busy to help
Too busy to cry

Grandpa's mind is going
Though deny it he might
There's no denying phone calls
At 3 o'clock at night

Too old to remember
Too old to walk
Too old to be considerate
Not too old to talk

So I leave dad alone
Try to comfort brother
Be as kind to grandpa as I can
And help out my mother

Because they are to busy
To see how it drains me
As I try to make things better
Or as good as they can be

But deep inside I'm weary
Fatigued to the core
And I feel despair to know
There is more in store

Brother's getting counseling
Mum might need it too
Dad will leave grandpa to me
And I don't know what to do

My body feels so heavy
My mind won't seem to go
Something is wrong with me
But what I'm too tired to know

Too tired to smile
Too tired to cry
Too tried to live
Too tired to die

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  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Wow this poem is so sad! but very nice i loved it

  • 18 years ago

    by Nelle

    WOW!!! i loved this one..You really are very talented you know how to express your feelings very well and it shows tons of emotions! great great job

  • 18 years ago

    by None

    My body feels so heavy
    My mind won't seem to go
    Something is wrong with me
    But what I'm too tired to know

    More nonsense...

    Ugh, you have tried to make an impression with the repetition, but, try as you might, it did not come off well at all. It was a hassle to the eyes and mind to read and did not make any substantial mark on this poem.

    Get some backbone. Do not listen to all of the other comments, saying that this poem is wonderful, full of sadness, and a great write. This poem fails to make any impact on me and is not a good write. Maybe friendly people are afraid to be frank in their comments, maybe they just do not want to hurt your feelings. Whatever the case, do not believe their sugar-coated lies.

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    This was a pretty good poem.

    It's really hard when people have to depend on you, but it also makes you stronger as an individual. It always seem like you're doing all the work, and I'm sure everyone else in the family feels that way, but in different situations. Like, your mom cleaning the house, your dad working.. etc (those are just examples) Everyone always thinks they have the most work. So I see the motive to writing this one. It was good, keep on writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I loved how you wrote this poem! How you explained how everything was too much for everyone. It was so sad. I hope this isn't true. It flowed well. The rhymes were good. Great poem!

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