Not too bad again I think you lack depth with your poems they start great but theres not enough of a story told to captivate me or bring me any sense of over whelming emotion...they end to abruptly...if you want a hand with improving your form just let me know I would be happy to help and if not I hope you can work with my criticism.
Eirisa

PS: Thanks for your comment also :O)

I forgot to mention I think this is better suited to friendship rather than sad catergory :o)

Woww! i thought this was excellent.. you really showed your hurt and anger through your poem.. dont worry hun, keep your chin up! :) nice poem!