It's really good, i like the 2nd last stanza the best, i hope emma gets to read it, i think it will mean alot to her just to read it, great job Suz :)

Dan

Wonderful poem! I loved you stanza, you're such a great writer!

"Be strong, be friends, be summers warmth
But don't let blood run hot
However if hurt you I do
Then forgive me not"

^^I thought that was a wonderful ending line. It was meaningful and it made a good point (at least to me) great job. 5/5

Why thanku. i hope it does mean something to emma too..... it's basically me saying sorry for hurting you emma... adn if i do it again, feel free to hit me.

Oh i will *evil grin* hehe
Very creative.
I loved it.
especially cause its to me
lol
anyway, yeah thanks again i loved it.
~Em

I like it. The only thing I think you need to fix up is this part:

Be strong, be friends, be summers warmth
But don't let blood run hot
However if hurt you I do
Then forgive me not

The last line seems a wee bit too short. It just sounds wierd when you read it.

This is a great piece though. Keep it up. I would add you to my favorites list but you have been on here ever since I created this account about a year ago. :)

>black&&blue

I loved this poem..The last stanza the second to last line got me a bit confused, but maybe I just read it wrong! I don't know, but all together it was a great poem very very sweet, the imagery was perfect!!

Chanelle--