Nice, a little confusing, but nice. If you are having trouble writing, just slow down, focuse on what you know, and what the point and purpose of the poem is. And dont forget, not all poems have to rhyme, in fact, some of the better ones dont.

Right on. that flows really good. you need toput a beat behind it.

I liked your description of writer's block. Although I'm sure you're upset, it was actually kind of a funny poem. Enjoyed! Jpoet*