That was amazing for your very first poem!! Keep writting hon!

Much love
Brigitte

You repeat ever too often by a bit. The first stanza was different and cute but it just sort of became too repetitive towards the ending. It was okay though and like I said I liked how different the first stanza was/felt.

Good peice, welll written and nicely expressed. only critism i have id that "muse" and "you" do not really rhyme.. unless it is just my accent which prevents them from doing...

anyway good peice