It was good as far as descriptions but really I want to know how they are feeling. I can get a sense of sadness from this but it doesn't feel enough to make me feel as sorry for the boy as I do for the girl, which is not as much as I would have hoped. I can get a good image of her crying though which means the visuals aren't really what you should focuse on. They're good enough as is.

I really like this one. Under the stars and the moon,, How romentic!! It is really well written and keep writing like this!!!

I like this poem, it's sad and so sweet. I love these lines:

And placed a delicate kiss
On my once smiling lips

I also liked the title.

Good job! 5/5
Keep writing.

Awww, this is so cyuuute

No wonder u got second place!
That was such a sweet poem!
Yet sad at the same time!! You have a talent of doing that dont you! lol

Jen

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