by PS
Aww so sad. ill come sit with you. you do a great job of capturing the sadness within three lines. |
by Kaylee
It was an okay poem, I'm not much a fan of the style, but it captured a sense of being lonely. |
by sfiawong
It looks not very likely a haiku. |
by Sean Allen
I feel like your haiku would gain more if you didn't use the first person at all. I think one of the beautiful things that haikus can accomplish is a implicit connection between nature and man. This haiku, on the other hand, made that connection explicit. By simply talking about the mountain's loneliness, you could imply to the reader that you are lonely as well. |
by LadyPearl
Nice and simple |
This poem was just okay for me, i guess i dont really like he Haiku style!!! But u did capture the sadness with jsut 3 lines!! good job!!! 4/5 |
by IfIhide11
Frankly I liked it alot. I is so hard to write a haiku. You did bend the rules though. But I'm glad you did. |