by sarah May 21, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
My hopes and dreams are now so clear |
by sarah
Thanks maybe ill try that next time |
by Lovely Bones
I like this poem a lot. Very nicely put. It has a great flow already, but the only suggestion I have to make it even smoother would be to take out some of the periods at the the end of a few of lines. Especially the ones where the last words rhyme. It would make it a whole lot less choppy =) |