Your poem was good but I didn't like the fact you kept repeating idiot, which though I agree some people are, and molest which just about sent a shiver down my spine. If your message was about how our society is going downhill then it's gotten across. It protrays the negative of society but not every optimist acts "gay."

It's a little diffrent..Some people may not like it. But I do. I thought it was creative and that you were telling how you feel. It flows well and makes sense.

However I did find one mistake. "ust because deranged priests,
molested little boy and girls."

Should be Boys, I think..Unless you meant for it to be "boy"

Other then that I liked it. Great Write.

Oooh, very nice Sean!
You make some very valid points and express them it such an outstanding way. I enjoyed this from beginning to end.
Well done~Holly

I kno how u feel. congrats on gettin a top spot in my contest! u were gr8. this poem is easy 4 me 2 relate 2...5/5

Wow that was acutally very good.As much as it is hard to say..it's very true as well.I loved this poem it speaks out a lot..The flow messes up a couple times but other than that it's written pretty well.I know that this poem wont sit well with most people though.I think it was well done and you have some talent..so please keep writing.
5/5

Wow this poem is so... i dont even know how to word it... i guess i would say "full".... i can relate to it... and i have many of the same beliefs about the world and what its coming to.

"Slitting wrists is now in style,
among the youth of this decade.
It's like your life can't be complete,
without drugs and getting laid." This is sooo true and this stanza is definately my favorite.. i dont know why it appeals to me so much... just the way it flows perfectly and fits together like a puzzle.
I noticed you used the word "idiots" twice... maybe you could find something else to use for the second "idiot" to make it flow better...

If your tired of "all their forced beliefs." then maybe you could find a better word to use other then "gay" in the fifth stanza. Other then what i said above... i really love this poem... the way it flows... the way it really makes you think. I analized it the best and most indepth way i could :) -Jen- 5/5

This is my favourite so far.
my favourite line is
'the world is moving backward'
makes you think.
everything about this poem makes you think infact.
except maybe one or two lines that didnt flow as well.
They didnt seem to fit but still my fav poem
5/5
~Emma

The flow was great the topice one of the best and i so believe the part about how parents should take a test.

"Slitting wrists is now in style,
among the youth of this decade.
It's like your life can't be complete,
without drugs and getting laid."

i loved that part in the poem the best becasue that seem to be the way of life now and it shouldnt be that way. nice job 5.5

Wow, very well written. I loved it. I am sure there are a lot of people that can relate to it. Awesome Job.

Peace, Joe

I really like this message. This poem brought alot of issues, true issues, and presented them in a fashion it should be presented in. I liked how you expressed these problems, and the rhyming was perfect and not even forced. I enjoyed it, and I'd like to read some more of your work... 5/5

I'm so sick of all their lies,
and all their forced beliefs.
I can't be happy with this world,
so I'll partake in the devil's feast

^^ that verse right there.. WOW is what i have to say about that. this poem is so true, im mean all that you said in this poem, once you think about it, it realy all of it makes sense.
this was a REALY great poem.. keep writing. your definatly getting a 5/5 from me.

Wow! that poem took my breath away.. it is just so true, everything you said there is very true and had a lot of though put into it! this was a good message and you really wrote it well.. i liked this, because it was different.. not just the usual boring things that people write again and again (like me.. :P) i really enjoyed this poem.. the rhythm and flow, the descriptions, the emotion, and the excellent message! brilliant work! 5/5!

I did like this poem, but not the first stanza. I think that this is the most important one of a poem, as some people will stop reading if it doesn't flow very well.
Our world is moving backward,
fighting wars from in the past.
Worrying about biological warfare,
when our president should be gassed.

The third line seems to long and doesn't fit in very well. I read it out loud and struggled to get the intonation right. I also found the rhyme not very good in this stanza, but that is probably just my accent :)
Other than the first stanza, this is an amazing poem. Well written, with some good points raised. You're a very good writer.

I agree that the 3rd line in the first stanza needs a little adjustment. Other than that, this poem is great. The last stanza was very powerful and it's not the kind of thing you read very often on this site. I think it's one of the best poems I've read on here. Thanks for sharing this

Wow, This was really good. Loved the 2nd stanza! Buuuut, The whole poem was really good. Had a deep meaning behind it. And I loved it! Awesome job! 5/5

`taleee xx

I think I left a comment once before but anyway. I shall leave another one.

I actually loved this poem. I thought it was creative and Unique and your wording choices, Well they speak for themselves. IT was truelly an amazing poem. The Flow was awesome, along with how it stayed in rythym..However..I think what made this poem, rather diffrent was how you weren't afraid to take real life issues and turn them into an Amzing piece of Poetry. I enjoyed this one Stanaza: 'There are so many idiots,
among the world today.
So many stupid optimists,
that are always acting gay.'
I thought it stood out to me the most. Anyway. None-the-less. Great Powerful Poem Dear. :)

I have to say, I agree with you, especially on the slitting wrists and religious part. I made a similiar poem like this. Though yours I must admit...is better. Great job!

I think this poem is very good, sadly its so true!!! I loved how you fit most of todays problems in this poem!1 the ryhme and flow was good it didnt seemed forced!! I thought you used "gay" in the right term so people shouldnt get affended!! 5/5!! Wonderful!!