Great poem// keep up the work

Very nicely penned Shaylee. I think it flowed nicely and has a wonderful tone.

This is a great piece of poetry it flowed really nicely.

great work 5/5

gemma 20 in cheshire

Great write...the flow was almost indistructable but what i really liked the mosy was the imagery you created with your carefully penned words.
Very deep!!

Wow..that was deep:O...its not the kinds of poems i write...but wow...u changed my mind a bit...ecstatic poem!!!

Really good it was full of passion, short and sweet!!!

Please r/r/c forienger, life vs I, and new me

I loved the imagery, and pretty much as a lot of other people said, it flowed really well.
It was a very passionate and deep poem.
I loved it.

Good job! this poem really shows the dark secreat side of intamacy, almost a caricature i would say.
keep it up!

Great work Shaylee. I loved the details and the message from this poem. It was all together good:)

--Steph

Shaylee --
Now, this was great! I really loved it! It expressed a lot of emotion which works really well in love poems. Great job hun!! Keep it up ;; you`re doing GREAT!!
5/5

**Samantha Hollywood

Wow!! This is the 2nd poem of yours I've read!! I really enjoy your work!! I love how you related lovers heart to beautiful things in nature!! A definite 5/5!

I love the metaphor in this! Its amazing-all the descriptions were so detailed. Great write-perfect-absolutely perfect---5/5!

Really beautiful. i likes teh reference to the sunste and lust. it's really sweet & kool. well done! rock on.

Vivid! Great word usage, and I love the fact that you don't tie yourself down to rhyming to try to pull this off - so many people do, and sometimes forcing a rhyme can ruin a perfectly good poem. You have some great imagery here, I love it.