by nekell
Great poem// keep up the work |
Very nicely penned Shaylee. I think it flowed nicely and has a wonderful tone. |
by gemowski
This is a great piece of poetry it flowed really nicely. |
by Laura
Great write...the flow was almost indistructable but what i really liked the mosy was the imagery you created with your carefully penned words. |
Wow..that was deep:O...its not the kinds of poems i write...but wow...u changed my mind a bit...ecstatic poem!!! |
by AnnMarie
Really good it was full of passion, short and sweet!!! |
by Heather
I loved the imagery, and pretty much as a lot of other people said, it flowed really well. |
by not a poet
Good job! this poem really shows the dark secreat side of intamacy, almost a caricature i would say. |
Great work Shaylee. I loved the details and the message from this poem. It was all together good:) |
Shaylee -- |
by Shawna
Wow!! This is the 2nd poem of yours I've read!! I really enjoy your work!! I love how you related lovers heart to beautiful things in nature!! A definite 5/5! |
I love the metaphor in this! Its amazing-all the descriptions were so detailed. Great write-perfect-absolutely perfect---5/5! |
Really beautiful. i likes teh reference to the sunste and lust. it's really sweet & kool. well done! rock on. |
Vivid! Great word usage, and I love the fact that you don't tie yourself down to rhyming to try to pull this off - so many people do, and sometimes forcing a rhyme can ruin a perfectly good poem. You have some great imagery here, I love it. |