Aw wow. That was kinda sad. Really good though. I loved it. Awesome job. Keep it up 5/5

`taleee xx

So much emotion and feeling throughout it... It's so sad but beautiful. I love the rhyming couplets too....
Amazing.. xxx

Feel so sorry for those who have parents like this, its just so terrible, what roots would the kids get if the atmosphere is like this.....i really wonder.

just stay strong dear and all the very best to u
5/5

Hey, So happy to see that this poem has been a success in yor recognition...Thanx for entering it in the competition...I'll let you know how things go and I owe you at lest 4 comments..2 for entering and 2 for using the title :)
Well done!
Jen X

This poem is very good, I'm impressed! I loved the ending, it was very powerful and well written. The poem flows nicely but in places it feels as if the rhyming is forced and that
detracts from the emotion of the poem
e.g
He will hit me, my face and his fist,
Outside there will be a mysterious mist

I called the police, gave them proof,
that you didn't give her home, you gave her roof.

Also one line you say grabbers? i think you meant to say grabs....Am i right? lol my english is not all that good so if i'm wrong let me know, something new to learn:)
But after all that and bearing in mind your age, i'll give you 5.
You are amazingly good for 14. Can't wait to read more of your work!

Wow u use so many detailed words in every poem it really paints a picture!

Fantastic write...i really mean that....you have a remarkable talent.

Wow.. so much emotion was flowing throughout this poem, it was soo sad! you really have a talent and you should use it to its full potential, just correct up all your little grammer mistakes and i am sure everything would be perfect! 5/5

Your poems are so moving, perfect rhymes and rhythm