Hope that this was just a work of fiction and no reality as its too sad and terrible to be part of such family.

i liked the way u wrote it
all the best and take care
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Gr8 work that was so gr8...lotta details..lovd it congrats on gettin 2nd ruyner up on my contest...5/5

Wow this is such a shocking poem....its sad to know that things like this do go on in the world this was my favourite stanza:

This awful man, so full of hate,
You as his wife is your fate.
He sits on his butt, and he always yell,
He wasn't even let in to hell.
He controls you, and he always shout,
You can't do anything, you can't go out.
You lost all your friends, all your hope,
If this was you, would you turn to the rope?

nice job.

Aww..thats so sad/depressing..I like the rhymes..so creative..and it's sad to know that some woment really are put in a position like that...

Jen
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Wow! that just took my breath away.. it was so powerful and so sad.. the emotions were oozing out and the flow was pretty good! there were just a few errors with grammer but you can always fix those! great job! 5/5

Very forceful poem. How dare a man calls himself a man if he abuses a woman. lol...nice job^-^