by Nate May 22, 2006
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
The orange and black Lepidoptera flitters like ashes in the wind; |
by Kim
I really loved the line "flitters like ashes in the wind" It has a real depth about it, I think if you could make that depth continue throughout, this poem would be fanatatic. A wonderful start ^_^ |
by Kaylee
It sort of feels rushed no offence. It's as if you could slow it down and scratch way below the surface of this poem to bring it to life if you wanted to. Use all the senses to help it become more realistic. |