A Soldier's Dream (Song)

Awsomen Poem man.

It was pretty short, but it was very good. I liked the ironic contrast between the thought of a loved one and the pulling out of a gun.

Nice song can't wait to hear it on the radio ( if posible)

Another fantastic song/poem I was whistling along as I read it I would love to hear some of your songs sung. Do you have them on a website or something? And i really can't think of any critisism for this one!
Aaron (remo)

It good poem, and it captures the 'battles' of a soldier, on and off the battlefield. The only problem i found, was in the first verse, where you had shot ending a line twice.
Maybe try, "Hearing guns fire" ? Just a suggestion. Awesome stuff though.