Its still good, but you were right with your note. for a five-ten minute thing its not bad though...it shows a couple odd images in your head though...not that bad

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I like this.. sounds like something I would say to my ex.. so I can definitely relate to this. 5/5

I can relate all too well. and this is pretty good for a 10 minute writing time..you can really feel your emotions...
Lauren

Aww its really good actually for being that short x x x x x