Honestly, i liked it... but i seemed like u tried to hard... Write wut u feel u no... just let ur heart flow rite out of u rite on to the piece of paper....

like don't let ur brain do the writing, let the pen do the writing...

good job tho... the last sentences seemed like it flowed more out of u? am i rite?? It seemed more simple... u no more soul searching for it than computer searching....

another thing i could say to anyone by the way... don't look for words on the enternet wen ur writing a poem u no? if u don't no the word then its not u u no? If u have to write a poem thats smarter than u are then ur not writing for urself ur writing for someone else....

anyhow sorry im blabbering on...

good job!