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Yeah, maybe if you wanted to, you could continue it and make it longer. longer doesn't necessarily = better, but it might help add to the clarity of this poem. i like the "running away, running to, running away" pattern

I think to make it better, you could explain why you're running to a place where you were not welcome. it confuses me. but that's cool about that poem. it;s confusing :)

This is quite a unique piece. Short but it conveys alot...that's not an easy task to complete.
Take care and keep it up~Holly

Call it "Running"! haha, lol, thanks for the compliment! I'm good at describing people. That's how i normally start off my poems.