It was very jumbled and confusing..he metaphors were good but unclear...nice job, but it could've been more specific or thougth out...keep writing,
love ya lots,
sore

I admit this is very jumbled. When I talk about actual stuff I stay vage, I don't want them finding this and getting mad at me for expressing how I feel in a "bitter" way.

I like this piece, the "jumbled" nature actually adds to the expression in my opinion.