by JAY Poet
Great poem i loved it girl please write another poem im dying to hear some more lol!! |
by Simon Hayes
Sad and gut wrenching. Very poignant. |
by Darien
Wow, that was a very terrifying poem. So sad, and so powerful. It scares me to know that kids can carry guns to school. A very good poem, I like the story from beginning to.. well, the ending was sad, but the heroine must die sometimes. Very creative write, I'm not sure if it's a story that happened to someone you know, or something you heard, but I'm sure it's true, somewhere in the world at least. Awesome stuff! |
by emmajaynexo
I liked this one in particular. |
by Nate
Awesome poem Tinyd! I teach school so your poem really hits home. I loved the way you rhymed your sentences. It flowed smoothly but at the same time the pace made my heart flutter. |
by Angie
Ok TinyD, here is your critique.... it's heartfelt, emotional and beautifully written. There really isn't anything I would change except to delete 2 words, and they are, 4th stanza "when" and 7th stanza "and" Other than that, the rhyme and flow make for a wonderful read that tells a very sad story....... |
It's so so so sad |
I fukin loved dis poem its so sad!!5/5 babez! well done! |
by obsessedgurl
I especially like this stanza: |
Poignant and amazing!!! wow... |
That was good. You know the sad thing is that really does happen. |
by firexflys
Wow o my goodness im at a loss of words this was one of the sadest poems i have ever read i wanted to cry the messages is amazing you never know when it could all end makes you think huh keep up the amazing work 5.5 |
by Amberinaa
Wow, thats really good. it sounds like something i would write. Its amazed me!! Your a great poet. Do you think you could check some of mine out? |
by Roxy
Omg as soon as i read the first line i knew it was sad |
by Knoxy
Hey, this is really good...i got cold shivers when i read this..it's so scary, and i know that it happens around the world...makes you realize how much ppl actually take for granted...great job..take care..5/5 |
by amor
I love the flow of your poem |
by Bridgette
Wow that is really sad.. it gave me chills.. You did a great job on this! |
by StephanieH
Wow, I absoloutely LOVE this poem, it's very well written, with a deep meaning and you can really picture the words you've used throughout this poem.. nice job |
It maybe another story behind this. |
by MissAlotta
Heartbreaking sad, especially this stanza, brought a tear to my eye |