Wow...amazing....i have felt like this...and everything i was feeling...you hit everything...i know how you feel...i loved it... Great Job...
Emma 5/5

Wonderful poem. I can relate to it. You did a wonderful expression of emotion in this poem, I loved reading it. I hope things start getting better for ou. 5/5, great poem.

Thanks for the comment on 'persecution'.

Overall I think this is a very good poem. The rhymes seem to come naturally to you, however they are quite simplistic. A more mature rhyme scheme can improve a poem drastically.

I watch the clock as time passes by
all day wondering why
amused by the way things change
in the blink of an eye.

This stanza has good content, but the structure is quite weak. The 1st and 3rd lines are long in comparison to the 2nd and 4th, making it slightly difficult to read.

Although I've picked out the things I didn't like, I think that this poem IS very good. Nice work xxx

Damn really an truly i love ur poems