I loved the repeating line...it really added to how powerful it was...i really enjoyed this piece...nice work...
Emma 5/5

No, because you not happy be happy ok, Oh I put you in my profile LOOOOOOOK well ttyl ill try and call you tonight i tried last night but no answer well ttyl luv ya bye

nick

I know right, Urg i didnt want him to win lol but its all good i guess. my friend don and i went to the school and did some bad stuff..so we migh get susbend lol but its all good.. we wetn here and brok up and spit and knoked stuff down lol no boyd was here but the doors were unlocked..and some other ppl were here for a concert we knoted on there door and ran lol haha it was all awesome.a.nd kayce doest lik him so they kept goin gback adn forth sayin bad stuf..and she lik well you better no be with friend with him and said she would breka up wit me..how gay oh well tty peace

I like your poem keep up the good work

No i am at school right now.. she not breaking up with me..he was just calling her bad stuff..and textin back and forth before they were kind of friends..now they HATE each other. lol

Hey i love this poem!!!!

Yes...i did something last night wif my friend..so yeah i told her i was going to do somthin bad..which i was planin it..she just keept crying and sayin nick no..i love you pleas dont do this..ands tuff..but yeah sorry.. i guess where over? I dont really know why you asked me..out i ma not sayin its bad..but you and i new i was goin back wither..i do lov her..sorry i am buthole lol.. so yeah well ill call you tonight later nick

Awesome poem, i love the flow and the repeat of the lines makes it really get the emotions across, it felt so strong that i started feeling guilty for nothing! lol. it's a greet poem, good job.

Lovely poem! ireally lykd it! 5/5

Thanks for the comment on my poem glad someone enjoyed it. Beautifully written by the way keep up the good worK! =)

5/5

Kay

Loved it, Very sad and I can relate.

Thats really great! I loved it. Well written and soulful. Good rhythm. It would be great if you could comment some of my poems too. It would mean a lot. Thanks. xo