I really like this poem, the everyday objects and activities make it feel so much more real, and the sadness comes out strong through that xx

I love this poem. I love th wording, the flow and the rythm. It was perfect. I loved this part the most though.
"Crumpled up sheets of paper
Cover my bedroom floor
Trying to let out my emotions
But it only hurts more"
Great Write Hun.

Very nice and i think thats why every one writes. we just try to get our emotions out.

Wow! very good write, very sad but very good! the last stanza was very powerful, and its actually sounds very similar to my poem "i need to let these emotions out". excellent job on this, lots of emotion, good flow, and great language! 5/5

I can't erase our past
I can't escape my pain
So I keep on writing
It's what keeps me sane
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Great way to end it! I loved this poem alot. It reminded me of some things I went through when I was like 13. The flow and rhyming were good. A great piece over all. Loved it. 5/5

`taleeee xx

Great peice, it is written fantastically well with some powerful content. the final stanza is brilliant, it says so much and finishes off the peice very well.

5/5

I think there was enough specificity in this poem to make it a good one. The general feelings that you're talking about are ones that many people have felt, but with some specifics, like the fact that you're listening to that song on repeat, is what gives it a special ring.

Yeah it was a good poem, I liked the begining, it flowed really well but i kind of lost the flow after the second stanza.
Some of the half rhyms worked well, showing unease and sadness.
I don't know if you ment to do this but i found it interesting how the gradual fall of structure and whole rhyms were like a metaphor for the broken relationship.
Good job
Aaron (remo) x

Yeah it was a good poem, I liked the begining, it flowed really well but i kind of lost the flow after the second stanza.
Some of the half rhyms worked well, showing unease and sadness.
I don't know if you ment to do this but i found it interesting how the gradual fall of structure and whole rhyms were like a metaphor for the broken relationship.
Good job
Aaron (remo) x

Sorry about the double comment

Powerfull and emotional.. I can really relate.. great work!!!

WOW i love it cause i feel the same way! i'm still in love with my ex-boyfriend. sad but wonderful job writing this. keep it up *5/5*

I love this poem... its so depressing and so full of deep and true emotions... i can definately relate... you kinda lost flow a little but all in all it was good. PS. I thought the ending was great :) -Jen- 5/5

Well done chicka I dunno what else to say ^_^

This poem expresses the emotions perfectly. I especially liked the stanza:

I've got my CD player on repeat
Crying, listening to "our song"
The first one you sang to me
While we were on the phone

because we've all been in that position and have that one song that we can't help but listen to but tears us apart...well in all this ramlbling i'm just saying: great poem