Like Lies

Like a velvet rose

I want to touch it

Manufactured, colorful, man made

I want to see it

Easy to see through when held to the light,
But when pressed to a surface, like when someoneâ??s directly involved, solid and opaque.

I feel like there too many words going on in there, I think you can say it without that many words...

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The best part is the only one seen
The lighting is chosen by the subject

like that

These all kinda seem seperate to me and yea they connect but I think it would be cool to put some transition lines in there maybe only one line inbetween or something or maybe I'm just out of it today

I like the overall concept of it, though something bout the three lies before and after the poem kinda bugs me, maybe you only need one or i dunno hmm

sorry, I'm not much help today

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