Yearnings

Same comment as I left on the last one about the capitalization.

Also, two things. First, I really don't like the line "but apparently not". I think you could change that to something else and still get your point across - not sure what, but that line just bugs me. Second, the way the flow of the second stanza goes, I want to unconsciously add the word "that" to the last line to read "i thought [that] it was you". Just a thought.

I like your poetic style. Not many people successfully and consistently rhyme every other line, but you pull it off well.

You had some really nice rhymes in this one. They didn't feel forced, it flowed well, and it was nothing too obviouos. Well chosen words. Really weird title though.

That was very good... i agree with her^^ *two thumbs up* - great job, i really liked it and felt what you were saying!

**meggie**

I loved this poem its really good, *two thumbs up*--- read mine sometime, your on my favorites now, great work!