Great peice, it flows well with some good description. the rhymes seem the run well and unforced troguhout. I think i may have seen a slight gramatical error in the second line where the word "went" should be "gone". other than that the peice is fantastically written throughout.

5/5

Nice piece. The thought behind it was really good. I can relate to it too in somewhat way. The flow was okay, and rhyming was alright too. Overall, I loved it. Keep it up =P 5/5

`taleee xx

Good poem! good language and a nice flow.. just a few little problems with tenses, maybe you could go over it and fix them all! other than that, very nice write!

Nice write. The flow was good and point taken. The only comment I have is "to long" should be "too long". Good write though. 5/5

Well im a one who believes in God very much so and i also believe keeping your faith and trusting him is one of the hardest things to do but he hears whats you pray for and he will answer them for you when he believe is right. keep your head and dont let for faith go away. love the flow btw keep your head up.

I think it was good and the flow was awsome. I don't wanna correct you and I don't wanna say you shouldn't say stuff like that about god. I usually would, but your poem has a point. Why scream for god when he doesn't hear or just doesn't want to. You know what your talking about and the best poems are the ones with the problems you've experienced. Keep writing. Your poems get to the point.

-ifihide11