Aww.. that is really sad and filled with so much emotion. The flow and rhythm of it was really good and you were very descriptive in it. You did a great job on this. I loved the imagery and everything! Great job! Definitely a 5/5***

W.O.W

This was so good. Really powerfull. Though its a little bit long, it kept my attention right to the end. I especially liked these lines;
"You have attacked me
You have abused me
You have destroyed me
You give me one last look
With those eyes like fire
And walk out the door"
They really stood out to me. Your poems are so good. Don't ever stop writing mmkay? 5/5 =P

`taleee xx

Heyy Jessy~~ it is such a powerful but also kinda sad poem. It contains something really impressive inside this poem. I love this wonderful writing.
GOOD JOB and KEEP IT UP~~~

I just aodre this poem. It has so much emotion and feeling put into it. The flow was there and the wording and rythym was consistent. This part however stood out the most.
"I am lying in the dark
For the rest of eternity
Forever to remember
Those eyes like fire.."
Great Write Hun.

This poem is really very good, extremly well written with a good flow and some amazingly powerful sections. the expression is clear and the content runs well throughout making a super peice of poetry.

5/5

Gosh
thats powefull
im speechless
my fave part was "Forever to remember
Those eyes like fire.."
excellent
5/5
xoxox
*MiSs MurDer*

Is it true? like if it is its an evil person! where do get inspired 2 rite such gr8 pems! anoder poem dat has made me feel like wut the gal must hav felt!

Great poem i loved it. i used to be abused, and i know what this is like. 5/5

You said to do the poem that caught my eye, and this one just reached out and grabbed me! then i read it...it has so much emotion and pain heaped in there, i absolutely loved it! 5/5

You said to do the poem that caught my eye, and this one just reached out and grabbed me! then i read it...it has so much emotion and pain heaped in there, i absolutely loved it! 5/5

I liked it, it was well worded, flowed brilliantly and was just a good poem, lil sad but the emotions were expressed well.
xxx

Again, very strong ending
"As you walk away
My head bleeds and bleeds
Leaving a puddle around me
My heart rate gets slower and slower
My eyes flicker open and closed
And then
Suddenly
I am lying in the dark
For the rest of eternity
Forever to remember
Those eyes like fire.. " this is my favorite part.

Wow, this was very intense so eerie and surreal yet shocking and hit so hard to home, the anger and desperation and fear are brilliantly portrayed.

Sondos

WH0A!! very deep poem. I like the last part the most, it wraps up the poem very well.

Thanks for your comment

Nice job i like the eyes like fire thing keep up the good work 5.5

WOW! very emotional. it was very deep. in the ending u told as if it was happening now. well writen the ending:)

I really enjoyed how you kept the focus on the eyes but it wasnt all there...I really dont know how to say what i want...none the less great poem...
Emma 5/5

WOW!
Fantastic ending! I love this poem!
It came across to me so strongly!
Well done!

Jen

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My god
you really are a poweful writer.
"You just needed to take out your anger
And the body you used
Was mine.." thsoe lines are so emotional..very impresed
5/5

Wow... i love this poem and its soooo full of emotion... it had a GREAT ending!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you kept my attention the whole way thru... sooo great :D you better never stop writing!!!!!! -Jen- 5/5